Second conference- reflection(revised)

From this conference, I get my midterm essay. I find many problems from the composition. First, I have to use the correct word to express my ideas. That is to say, I have to avoid thinking as a Chinese way, and trying to think as a foreigner. I also have to learn more new words, and then I can have a well word controlling. It is quite hard for me because I need to increase my reading quality and quantity as soon as possible.
According to teacher's feedback, I also get the same suggestion. I need to read more English article in order to use the right word in compositions. I have to work on grammar. For example, to avoid making a wrong sentence structure. Second, I have to paragraph my article appropriate and to avoid long sentence. That is to say, I need to put the clear main ideas in every paragraph.
Thank to my group member’s suggestion that I can know my mistake of the midterm exam essay. First, it is lack of examples in my article. If I put more the object examples or sharing more about my experience, it will be persuasive. Second, I have some wrong spelling words in my article; I have to revise it clearly! Third, I can use some transitional words to make my article fluently. That is to say, I need to pay attention on the connection between paragraphs to paragraph. I agree with the suggestion because the transitional words can make my article more logical and easy to read.
I find that I usually to write in a formal way. For example, the words “talk” and “tell” are informal, I should to remember this. I also need to put more object examples into my article to support my arguments. Besides, as what teacher said, we usually make the same mistakes time after time. We usually can not find out the mistake we make, if we just check out by ourselves. That's the reason why to ask students do the peer revision. I think that change ideas by each other can help us to discover something we usually miss before. For example, according to the suggestion from my teammate, I find that I need to put more specific evidence to convince my readers. I think this can be a great example to used in my article. One of reasons to writing the work sheet is to change the ideas each other. I think that we can learn more by sharing the ideas and opinions with everyone. Therefore, the argument in my article is supporting to use work sheet to share, and actually we do the same thing-sharing the ideas on Internet in our real life.
To conclude, after receiving my annotations, I was so disappointed to myself. I need to work hard for revising my errors in my composition. The first thing to do is to "improve my reading and writing skill". "No pain, no gain!" If I want to make a progress, it is time to work hard now!

First conference-reflection(revised)

In the beginning, I use “learning sheet or worksheet” as the key words for searching on the Internet. I was so upset because there were useless elements. Besides, I can’t find anything proper for my paper. So, I almost want to give up and change my topic of the paper. After the conference, I find that I make a big mistake. I use an incorrect key word to search. Teacher gives me a really great key word: Scaffold. It means the effect of learning sheet. We use learning sheet to make sure whether the information we receive from the text is digressive or not. Besides, when we answer the question on the learning sheet, we can try to use accurate words to express what we think at the same time. The process of learning reading and writing are like the scaffold we use to construct the building. After I use “scaffold” as key word, I can find many useful information to help support my paper. During the time I read this text, I can get more idea about this issue.
According to peers and teacher’s feedback, I need to revise my composition. First, I need to explain that are there any differences between young children and college students or between learners at a lower level and those at a higher level? If I can explain the difference clearly, it will make my article more persuasive. Second, the types of the work sheet may affect different the effect, so I need to explain more about the type of the work sheet. I think I will mention the work sheet of open-ended and close-ended type in my research paper. Third, I can discuss more about the motive to write about this topic because it can make my readers know the main ideas I want to express. To base on my group members’ suggestion, they suggest that I can put more specific examples of reading and writing experience. I also can share more about my learning experience with the readers. It will be evidence to support my argument.
Besides, I can compare the shortage and advantage of using work sheet as a teaching tool. That will help readers to understand the real function of work sheet. I can put some successful example to convince my audience, and to supply some opinions from teachers to make my article become reliable. I think that to interview some students may be a great way because I can know their feeling in doing the work sheet. If I collect their opinions, I can try to find the way to solve the problems or shortage of the work sheet.
Next step, I want to interview some people include teachers who use learning sheet for teaching tool, elementary school students and high school students. I hope I can learn more and increase the experience of solving problem during the time of writing this paper. To make my arguments clearly and put more powerful evidence are the thing I need to do.